Parallelism
The writer had no problem in constructing a paralleled essay and he did not run from the topic that he was supposed to write about. There was a subtle flow between his sentences which makes it easy to read and understand.
Consistency
This essay was written consistently, with the writer using chronological order to point out his points. However, the conclusion was abrupt and did not summarize the points of the essay.
Specific words
The essay is written specifically, with enough description and it is not vague.
Active verbs
Naqib used plenty of active verbs to describe his points.
Concise words
Some of his descriptions were quite long-winded. Perhaps there are other ways to replace those long descriptions with concise words.
Variety of sentences
Naqib used a lot of long and medium sentences but there were no short once so it lacks in variety.
Others
There were some grammatical errors throughout the essay, and the tenses used were not consistent.
This is my review on the essay. If there's anything wrong or missing I am sorry, here's a potato:
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