Tuesday 30 July 2013

My Edited Korean Essay using Exemplification Method (sort of)

About two weeks ago, Mr Adlan organized a micro teaching session for us to attend with some Korean exchange students. Therefore on Monday we went to ‘Menara SAAS’ by bus at 1 o’clock in the afternoon. The class is at 2 o’clock and we had plenty of time, so we lingered around and got more and more excited to meet the Koreans. Mirul was smiling and laughing, a few K-Pop fans were discussing about Korean stuff, and I looked like I did not care but I was pretty excited as well.

Around 1.50 pm, we entered a small hall that was to be used for the micro teaching session. First thing I saw when I walked in were cameras, big lights, and a projector, as if we were shooting a movie. Then the image of the Koreans struck me, which was definitely very different from ours. They were very fair and quite petite, and had pink cheeks, thin lips and almond-shaped eyes. Their sense of fashion was more or less different from ours as well. A few of the girls were wearing floral-printed dresses with colourful tops creatively matched with, unlike us since we were wearing ‘baju kurung’.

The Koreans were divided into two groups, and the first group which was Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, taught us with much enthusiasm and fun. They made an interesting introduction with Charlie, the only boy in the group, by walking in while singing a song. They made jokes and laughed at ours and kept asking us questions so we stayed interested in the lesson. Besides that, they held fun games that could educate us well. For example, there were singing, guessing and lyric-writing games that had something to do with the lesson, which was about action verbs.

Even though the second group was not as fun as Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, we still had an enjoyable session with them. They had interesting hand-outs and exciting games, like the one where we had to guess the picture of the person plastered on our back, by describing them. However, one of the things that drew my attention the most was their politeness. They smiled a lot, never raised their voices to us and said ‘thank you’ or ‘good job’ when we finished a task. Although at times we got noisy, they kindly asked us to lower our voices without being rude. They kept smiling and maintained their calmed tones while doing so.

When the lesson ended, we had the opportunity to interview the Koreans. From interviews I conducted myself and the ones I heard from others, some of them did have a few things in common with us. Some of them loved mainstream pop songs, they loved being energetic and positive and they loved to eat Malaysian fried rice as it had a similar taste to Korean food as well. On the other hand, some differences surely could not be avoided either. When I interviewed a girl named Claire, she said she did not like our country’s hot weather since in Korea it was cooling, and durian made her feel nauseous, which sounded queer to us Malaysians as durian was the local king of the fruits.


Nevertheless, meeting them was a great experience and taught me how to interact with people from overseas. If I am given the opportunity to do it again, I would happily do it.

P.S.: I hope this is more or less correct, because:

My Review on Someone's Korean Essay

The essay I had the pleasure to review was Naqib's, about a Korean he met while she was conducting a micro teaching session.

Parallelism
The writer had no problem in constructing a paralleled essay and he did not run from the topic that he was supposed to write about. There was a subtle flow between his sentences which makes it easy to read and understand.

Consistency
This essay was written consistently, with the writer using chronological order to point out his points. However, the conclusion was abrupt and did not summarize the points of the essay.

Specific words
The essay is written specifically, with enough description and it is not vague.

Active verbs
Naqib used plenty of active verbs to describe his points.

Concise words
Some of his descriptions were quite long-winded. Perhaps there are other ways to replace those long descriptions with concise words.

Variety of sentences
Naqib used a lot of long and medium sentences but there were no short once so it lacks in variety.

Others
There were some grammatical errors throughout the essay, and the tenses used were not consistent.

This is my review on the essay. If there's anything wrong or missing I am sorry, here's a potato: